This week in class we focused a lot on writing and working on our personal statement essays. The idea for mine came really randomly, but when I talked about it with some friends and teachers they all said to go for it and write it, so I did!
One thing that I think was really important to my essay was the fact that it contained very vivid imagery. The essay so far seems to easily draw the reader in, and I feel the audience really understands the situation I’m describing. The bad news about this though, is that I spent so much time working on the imagery and painting the scenery of the story, I have trouble actually getting to my point. This essay, not actually having a clear point, is not bad but, in the end, almost useless. I have some ideas about how to correct that though, mainly by adding in a little more plot and action without sacrificing the imagery that is so far working well.
One thing about it that I really like, is that it is a tad unusual. Although I wrote in the first person, the way I tell the story in the past tense and spend a lot of time on imagery makes it seem more like a short story than an essay — and unfortunately, without my point being very clear, it is more of a short story than an essay. If I am able to work in my point a little better, I think the essay will be able to stand as an essay, but still have the unusual format that I think will make it an enjoyable read as well as a memorable one.
The biggest issue I have with it at the moment is my general vaugeness and lack of a clear point. Hopefully that will be remedied in the next draft.
On the bright side, it is currently very, very short in length, meaning that I have lots of room to write more, expound and improve! I really hope that I’m able to make it very good in the next draft!
See y’all next week!